英语写作中最容易被忽视的指代风险
在批改或阅卷中,有一句常见的评语:
“It’s unclear what this refers to.”
这并不是语法问题,
而是读者在阅读时找不到明确参照物。
📍 一、读者如何感知“指代风险”?
读者在阅读一句话时,会下意识地问:
- it 是哪一个?
- this 指的是哪件事?
如果需要停下来思考,
理解成本就已经升高。
📍 二、最容易被忽略的三种指代陷阱
1️⃣ it 指向多个名词
❌
The policy influenced education and technology. It developed rapidly.
✔
The policy influenced education and technology, which developed rapidly.
(明确修饰对象)
2️⃣ this 没有“名词落点”
❌
Many people rely on technology. This is worrying.
✔
Many people rely on technology. This trend is worrying.
3️⃣ they 指向不唯一
❌
Students talked to teachers about parents, and they were worried.
✔
Students talked to teachers about parents, and the teachers were worried.
📍 三、为什么评分者对指代特别敏感?
因为在评分语境中:
- 阅读时间短
- 容错空间小
- 模糊 = 风险
当指代不清时,
评分者往往不会反复猜测作者意图。
📍 四、一个“评分安全”的指代判断法
写完后,快速检查:
👉 删掉前一句,看代词还能否理解
- 能 → 相对安全
- 不能 → 需要修改
这是最简单、也最有效的测试。
📍 五、三种稳妥的风险规避策略
策略一:代词 + 名词
❌
This leads to problems.
✔
This situation leads to problems.
策略二:必要时重复名词
❌
The plan was introduced. It caused changes.
✔
The plan was introduced and caused changes.
策略三:重组句子减少歧义
❌
The manager contacted the client after they complained.
✔
The client complained, and the manager contacted them.
📍 六、清晰度优先于“变化感”
很多学习者担心重复,
但在正式写作中:
重复名词 ≠ 低级
模糊指代 = 高风险
清楚,永远比“看起来变化多”更重要。
📍 七、把指代当成“风险管理”
成熟写作的一个标志是:
- 预判读者可能误解的地方
- 主动消除歧义
这正是从“能写”走向“稳定高分”的关键。